Sunday, September 20, 2009

Voices

time not being mine

the number ticks past the mark of nine

i can not ask it to kindly stop for me

all we may do is rest here with bended knee


the man with drap-ed hair

he asks to be next to his lady mare

there they go side by side

toils and tales forever tied


and nobody sits still in silence

all diverged in word, story, or song

waiting, resting,

saved or damned all along


lifes' voices have befriended you and i

yet, we are not made new to die

let us live in the quiet, the still

then, only then, may we get these places to our fill

1 comment:

  1. Hello, Margaret!

    I have to say first and foremost that I appreciate your use of words like "drap-ed", and your style of writing that excludes capital letters. It makes your poetry read like lovely little notes jotted down to someone - I can picture a tattered notebook and quill pen.

    Your first line is very strong and caught my attention right away -- you have a number of lines like this throughout the poem that reveal a very thoughtful nature.

    What I would venture to say is that you don't need a meter OR rhyme, although it can be nice. I like that there is variation and that rhymes seem to be natural occurrences, but if you were going to edit this I would recommend avoiding rhymes.

    In all though I really like this poem and your other poetry. Keep it up!

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